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El Refran First Draft_Middlebrooks

Posted by Manna-Symone Middlebrooks in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

Refrain:

De alimento para el alma de sonrisas y risas, yo vengo.

Los árboles de alta en el cielo con los brazos abiertos rama.

Siempre buscando

Basta con buscar

El futuro y el pasado están aún por definir.


The refrain is intended to communicate highlights of where I am from. Those highlights include smiles, laughter, food from the soul, nature, past, and the future. I think that the words flow nicely together and, hopefully, will be easier t put to music. The refrain could be a bit more literal instead of abstract to allow some grounding. Finding words and attempting to make tim flow was the most difficult part of writing the refrain.


Keiasha Lumpkins ( Refran)

Posted by Keisha Lumpkins in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

yo vengo amo

yo vengo filidelfia

yo vengo me

yo vengo todos por encima 

(refran)​

My refran is just about who I am and what i do. That's could be described where I am from. I am happy that I can write about what I want in my song. I would like to improve by adding more to my refran and make it better. I was difficult because I didn't know what to write about at first.

Refan De Anastsia

Posted by Symone Smith in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

Vengo de un lugar tranquillo.

Una casa de amor.

Vengo de la musica

Y bailar.



Its supposed to communicate that I come from a place that is quiet but at the same time some things that go on can be loud.I'm happy that it was extremely hard to write my first draft, it simple but captures what i want to say.As an improvement I think that I might want to make the lines rhyme.

NaQuan's Refran

Posted by Naquan Harding in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

Es el olor

Es los vistas

Es el sabor

Es las memorias

es la dicha

es filadelfia

  • What is your refrán supposed to communicate? 
My refran is basically just listing the things that I like about Philadelphia.
  • What are you especially happy about with your first draft?
What I like most about this is that it sort of gives me a list to go off of. It gives me things that i can describe in the actual verses to make this an actual song. Also, just looking at the words gives me a basic idea of what the beat may be like.
  • What would you like to improve about your refrán first draft?
I may consider trying to shorten the number of syllables used in each line. Looking at the words, some lines have too many syllables to keep the beat flowing. I may also consider finding lyrics that go a little deeper than what I have now.
  • What was difficult about writing your refrán? 
The difficulty for me came in trying to think of words for the thing. I wasn't too worried about beat, but I was worried about coming up with a chorus that'll effectively describe where I live.

Refran

Posted by Maximilien Marton in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

​​Soy de Filadelfia
de la música árabe
y la cultura francés
Soy de mi familia
Los personas Locas
soy de mí

My refran is a summery about my family and culture.
I like the rhythm of my refran
I would mike to add some rhyme to the refran
Making the refran sound catchy was hard.

Stewart-McDonaldRefran

Posted by Sabrina Stewart-McDonald in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

​Yo vengo de una ciudad.
historia, arte, y música
Mi corazón vive en ese ciudad.
Mi alma pertenece aquí.

I wanted my refrain to give an overall idea of where I'm from and how I felt living/being from there. So, I basically wanted to just write a few short lines that gives the general idea of where I'm from and make the verses go into the detail.
I like that I started using a type of figurative language. I usually find it easy to write poetry, but thinking about writing a song usually makes me think of how hard it can be to incorporate poetry into music, so I'm just glad that I just delve into writing the refrain and didn't really think about the fact it was going to be a song.
I would like to make it longer and maybe make it a little more poetic. I think it may be too short and that there's so much more I could possibly do with it.
I found it hard to make a rhyme scheme or make a certain flow, I feel like it needs more a flow or something that will make it seem more like a song than one of my freestyle poems. 

Maggie's Refran

Posted by Margaret Long in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

​Soy de Filadelfia
Cheesesteaks, pizza, las papas fritas.
No muy colina
Todos los días muere alguien.

My refrain is supposed to tell the person where I am from. What I like, and what happens in a short chorus. I am happy with the Spanish that I added into it. I think I did an ok job at translating using wordreference. I would like to make it longer and a little less depressing. I had a hard time making things in Spanish rhyme. 

Danny's refran

Posted by Daniel Wirt in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

vengo de america
vengo de filadelfia
vengo de fútbol al béisbol
vengo de mis amigos a mi familia 

It just talked about the things that have made me who i am today. Also the things that are very important or were very important to me at some point in my life. 

Chelsea Janette Smith

Posted by Chelsea Smith in Spanish 3 - Gierke on

La musica estallido 
Personas danza
Todos disfrutar se quieren
Eso es mi barrio
(Repetir 2x)

My refrain is suppose to show were I at and how it is around in my neighborhood. 
Im happy with how easy it is to flow with and how it makes sense and is easy to comprehend for anyone.
I just want to make sure that the draft makes a lot of sense and if there is a way to improve it that I can do that. 
The only thing I found difficult was actually choosing something to write about and being able to base a whole song on something that I can make sense of.

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2011-12

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