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Advanced Essay #1: Rigor Mortis

Posted by Nicholas Ryan in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 9:12 pm

Introduction
My goal for this essay was to write something that evoked emotion into other people. I wanted to be able to write a piece that would be relatable on an emotional level and recreate the emotion that I felt during the time of this piece. I would say that I did really well with really describing how I felt during these experiences and how I feel about the whole situation overall, I feel like I really put my feelings on paper and made it MY essay. I am not sure if I evoked emotion into other people while they read this but hopefully I did. The part I needed more work on was the analytical side of the essay. My theme focused mainly on the understanding of death and how a lot of people today don't even accept it as an actual thing until they see it for themselves, but the little bits of reflection that I placed all throughout the essay, I feel like weren't strong as far as being analytical. However, I am satisfied with the final product and I hope it evokes the strong emotions, that I felt, into other people.

​Advanced Essay

Pew, pew, pew! The lasers blasted from my futuristic laser gun. I stood on the porch and in the distance, was my friend Chris. I aimed the transparent gun at him, ready to win. “I got you now!” The shots fired from the series of noises from my mouth. We loved to play pretend as soldiers from 2239, the thrill of battle filling our minds. This was an everyday thing for us, every day was a different story with different characters and a different plot.

“Agh! You killed me!” Chris shouted from the sidewalk. He proceeded to hunch over and dramatically die from being blasted with a laser.

“Oh shut up, it’s not like you’re actually dead. It isn’t like we could actually die now. Actually, I’m gonna live ‘til I am 500 years old!” I said with pride.

“Uh, no you’re not. You’ll die before then.” Chris replied.

“What do you mean?” My head was spinning. What was he talking about? I never met anyone who actually died. I thought people dying only happens in the movies or video games. I had never been so confused in my life. Was he joking?

“Yeah, everyone dies. My mom told me that.”

“Nick! Come here!” My mom called me in, looking nervous. “Nick, I have to tell you something.” Sweat formed on her forehead. “Uncle george has passed away.”

“What?”

Patter, patter, patter. It was raining. The sky was bleak and grey, the air was muggy, and I was sweating in my little suit. I traveled up the stairs, step-by-step, each time, the grip on my hand tightening. I walked in with my mother, not really knowing what to expect. The carpet was a beautiful maroon red and there was a small glass chandelier in the middle of the family room. Family members and familiar faces were all around. I stayed quiet the entire time while my mother spoke very softly with the rest of them. Then, we entered the viewing room, and the atmosphere transformed in a split second. There was a heaviness in the room. Most of the family were gathered in the seats in front of the wooden box, however, there was someone-no, something else that wasn’t accounted for in the room. My mom’s grip tightened even more, my hands turning purple. We inched closer and closer to the wooden box, the heaviness becoming thicker by each step. Half of the lid was open. I peered inside, and saw something I would never forget. My first dead body. It was my uncle. Everything in my childish mind began to fall apart. My mother had mentioned that my uncle had passed away and gone to a place called heaven. I didn’t understand it, what does it mean? I was in denial. I thought death was in video games, and even then, you came back to life. The eternal sleep that the vessel of my uncle faced in his new home. He was a phantom, so pale it made me sick. Now, he wasn’t here, just a ghost in my memories. I reached and held his hand, it was ice cold. I stared in shock, my mouth slightly gaped. I wasn’t looking at my uncle anymore, just a box within a box. Warm streams of tears ran down my cold face. I shivered in devastation, fear. This couldn’t possibly ever happen to me…

Ding! The elevator doors slid open, the muffled scratching of metal against metal emulating from the small opening on the floors. My sister, my dad, and I stepped out into the hallway. There was tension in the air and I felt as if a plastic bag was forcibly wrapped around my head. In the hallway, there were stretchers pushed against the walls, the imprint of its victim clearly visible. Nurses and doctors frantically treading from door-to-door to help any patient desperately in need of patches and painkillers. We walked towards the end of the hall, where to the left of us was the front desk. “Dr. James to the I.C.U, Dr. James to the I.C.U.” said the nurse over the loudspeaker. The hallways reeked of hand sanitizer and a mixture of various cleaning supplies. As we inched closer to our destination, the sound of small wheels frantically rolling could be heard in the distance. A horde of nurses raced down the hall with a patient that had wounds deeper than the uneasy feeling in the pit of my stomach. Pretty soon, we were a couple steps away. I had made the mistake of turning my head to the left. An Asian woman laid in her stationary hospital bed, her blank eyes facing the ceiling. A man sat alongside her, hunched over, sobbing. I stared directly into a room of lost hope and a lost soul. In a split second, I turned away. Out of morbid curiosity, I looked into the room next to it, and I saw a black man with bruises all over and an elderly standing next to him, praying. I did not make the same mistake again. We were right at the door, the entrance to my aunt’s deathbed. A male nurse came out and advised us to wear scrubs before we entered. We all scrambled to put on the tight, light cyan blue jumpsuits and the white caps. I walked in, scanned the room and saw familiar faces, my two uncles, my cousin, and my two great aunts all with their heads bowed in gloom. And then, I saw my aunt, her eyes wide open and blank just like the lady from before. Her mouth gaped, frozen in shock. Her body was still living, but I could already see rigor mortis taking effect on her soul. This was true death. Not the pale blue body, not the gray pupils surrounded by a green hue, not the breath that fails to leave her mouth. No, death was the lack of a soul. Her soul had long departed her body and it was evident. I felt nothing holding her hand, speaking to her. I felt absolutely nothing from her, not her lively energy nor her warmth. I learned that day, Death doesn’t reap bodies, it reaps souls.


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Advanced Essay #1: Upturns

Posted by Salsabeel Elbakhadaoui in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 9:08 pm


Introduction: I personally enjoyed the making of this essay, I loved writing the descriptive scenes. I feel like i'm better with writing descriptive scenes and creative writing than any other type. I'm really proud of my scenes more than anything, but I think I could improve on my reflections. Overall i'm really happy and proud of this essay.


Dating your best friend must be something different, especially when you know them so well, you know their deepest darkest secrets and they know yours. You both know you like one another but you could never admit it until you drifted apart.  

There he was standing right infront of me, giving me that “love at first sight” look. Each of his arms were in each pocket of his beige joggers, He was wearing a black floral tank top and was looking down at me. He was at least 5’11, his blondish hair was tucked into his snapback.

“You look gorgeous” he says. I smile and begin walking along his side as he holds my hand.

We walked into a pool hall called Seventy Five and found a seat all the way at the back of the hall. I begin fiddling in my purse and take out my charger to charge my phone. He lays his arm around my shoulders and we begin talking about what we’ve been doing with our lives as the waiter comes by

“What would you like to have ?”  

We both ordered drinks and he gets up to pay for two rounds of pool.

“Je ne sais pas how to play pool,” I say, and began laughing

He smiles at me and says, “C’est pas grave, doesn’t matter I’ll teach you, you won’t lose.”

I was leaning against the pool table as he was fixing everything. I was wearing a green crop top with a high waisted mini skirt from H&M with buttons running down the middle. My hair was naturally curled, loose big curls that spiraled so perfectly and evenly.

I could see him from the side of my eye staring so hard at me, it was all so crazy at the same time how close we once were and how we’re finally admitting feelings to each other but it’s like we never left.

“Salsa ready?”

He aims the cue stick at the ball and positions my arms and hands as he’s standing behind me bending over at my height, I turn around and stare into his eyes as he stares into mine.

I never forgot that moment, I never forgot him, and I never forget how it all changed. It marks a spot when lose your best friend because they hurt you. This is someone you always trusted, this is someone you grew up with. It was shocking, Shock like the shock I felt when I was told I might have had cancer. Last year I broke my ribs, dehydrated, had an inflamed liver, and a mass all at the same time. I couldn’t walk, breathe, sleep, sit, turn, stand, laugh, and 12 hour pain killers didn’t work on me. But Thank god I didn’t have cancer and I am back and healthy.  I’ve explored many different kinds of shocks in my life that really changed me as person.


Four years ago I almost died… It made me a stronger and a braver person than I was before. We were at JFK International Airport and ready to go back to Morocco like every summer. I couldn’t wait to see my family and friends and spend time with them. I was about 12 years old at the time, holding a baby blue suitcase ready to have the summer of my life. Who knew what fright was awaiting us that day.

The weather was completely different when we got to New York it was really windy and it seemed as though a storm was heading our way. I was wearing a white Nike hat, high waisted shorts, and a plain, white, cropped shirt.  

“Ladies and gentleman I am sorry for the delay, but we are now taking off,” said the woman over the intercom, thank you for choosing Royal Air Maroc,” she continued. “Please enjoy the flight,” she finally said before ending the announcement.

After getting situated I began watching Frozen with my little sister,

They gave the orders to the pilot to take off after keeping us in a plane for 2 hours because of the turbulence  

“Let it go, let it go I can’t hold it back anymore,” Elsa started to sing.

My head bannged into the ceiling, the food in the back spilled, and all I could hear were people screaming and crying. The flight attendants started running towards their seats to put on their seat belts.

“S’il vous plaît, calmez vous. S’il vous plaît! Calme toi!” said the flight attendants.

I couldn’t think, everything was going by so fast and I couldn’t register what was going on but all I could do was wait and see how it ended. If I didn’t go through this all I feel like I wouldn’t be the person I am today.


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Advanced Essay #1: Why I Love Competition

Posted by John Sugrue in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 8:56 pm

​Introduction
My goal for this essay was to write a really captivating narrative, and I think I achieved that goal excellently. I'm really proud of the suspense my story creates, and I hope it successfully achieves that for the reader. I would like to improve on my reflection a little bit, as I pushed it to the wayside somewhat for the story. Either way, I hope you enjoy my story!
Advanced Essay
One of our team’s first quizbowl tournaments of my sophomore year happened in November of 2016. I was super excited for it, as I am for most tournaments. That day, we were on fire. Of the 8 other teams we played against, we won 6 games, losing only 2. Our last round was a bye, and I was sure we wouldn’t be able to win the tournament, until we were greeted by a player on one of the other top teams at the end of the round.
“You guys are SLA, right?” the familiar face asked.
“Yep.”
“You’re in the playoffs.”
I was ecstatic. However, we had a tough road ahead of us. We would have to beat out both of the other teams who had ended at 6-2, then beat the best team (who went 7-1) twice. The first round went by quickly. We shut out the other team, answering questions efficiently and beating them to the buzzer. Our next opponent was easily the best team at the tournament. Of our two losses earlier in the day, one was to them. The pressure was mounting. As they took their seats, we sat in anticipation of the incoming game. My heart was pounding.
I think back on this moment, and think a lot about the feelings. I felt nervous for the sake of our team; what if we lost? It would’ve been terrible to come so far only to lost in the final moments. This, in and of itself, reveals some aspects of competitiveness as a whole. We, as humans, feel some need to compete. Our competitive drive needs to be fulfilled in some sense or another. For me, I find quizbowl to be an excellent outlet of that competitiveness. It helps me funnel that need for competition in a healthy way. 
The game was insanely back-and-forth. One of the team’s members insisted on asking for score checks as the last few questions ticked down. With three questions left: “115-135”. They were up by 20, but we rallied back and grabbed a toss-up and a couple bonuses. Two questions remained: “145-135.” The other team took the penultimate toss-up and one bonus. “145-155.” We were down by 10 points going into the final question. The moderator begins to read, and my heart was pounding. I was beginning to piece together the answer about halfway through the question, when someone on the other team buzzed. “Shirtwaist Fire,” he said. Well, I thought to myself, it’s over. We had a good run. The moderator replied, “Neg 5.”
A neg in quizbowl is when you interrupt the moderator, and get the question wrong. This nets your team a loss of 5 points. This meant the game was now one tossup away from our grasp. I listened intently as the moderator finished the question -- didn’t I learn about this in eighth grade? In the class that I didn’t really like? I just couldn’t, for the life of me, think of the name! The question ends. I looked frantically at my three teammates. They looked back, giving me an “I don’t know” look. I pressed down on the buzzer.
“Player 4.”
After buzzing, a player gets 5 seconds before they’re cut off. I watched the fingers on the moderator’s hand go down, one by one.
Five…
My mind frantically rushed through the class, trying desperately to think of the name of the fire. 
Four…
I remembered the least useful details: sitting on the middle right side of the room with a fake wall to my right, the projector set up with a PBS documentary playing, imagery of fire burning on the screen.
Three…
Suddenly, I was hyper-aware of all of the things that were going on. My team’s chances at winning depend on my right answer. This question will send us to the final round, which we can succeed in. What was the name of the fire?!
Two…
I remember more and more imagery from the documentary: women in the streets protesting, a shirtwaist factory burning down… My heart is racing, pounding at a million miles per hour. 
One…
Just as the moderator was about to cut me off, I blurted out one word: 
“Triangle!”
The incident in question was the Triangle Shirtwaist Factory Fire. We won. My heart raced, the adrenaline was flowing, and I just laughed. It was a nervous, adrenaline-high laugh, where I just felt the need to release the stress I was feeling in the moment. We moved onto the finals, played two flawless games, and took home the trophy.

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Advanced Essay #1: Time Flies

Posted by Bea Gerber in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 8:21 pm

Introduction:

This paper, to me, was intended to express my fear and love of time. I wanted to demonstrate the fragility of a moment, and how something so meaningless to one person can be the result of a lifetime for another. I think that I did a good job using description and painting a picture for my audience, but I think I could do better at tying my ideas together in the future. I wish I’d done a better job of getting my message out the way I see it in my head because I think it got a bit blurred. My future writing will reflect that, but overall, I am pretty happy with what I created.


Advanced Essay:

Small cafes and restaurants line the sidewalk. It is getting dark and we are trying to pick the perfect place to eat. A street light blares down on us and illuminates the concrete. At my feet, I see a man and woman together, in love, trailed by a sea of green. Smiles like no other envelope their faces, the corners of their lips creeping to their ears as they look out of the carriage to the brand new scenery. Above them, words stretch across the tree coated sky. One yellow followed by white, alternating like the sun peaking through clouds, reading “honeymoon in manhattan.” The couple’s gaze travels up and lands on the “moon,” awaiting their adventure. I reach down to get a better look, and realize that what I thought was a newspaper was really a stack of record covers. Beautiful colors and fonts and patterns lay abandoned on the street with their musical partners sitting neatly beside them. I let out a shriek of joy and stop my family.

“Look!” I say. “There’s tons of them!”

They follow to where I’m squatting and leaf through the antique records on the curb. We grab as many as we can hold, and carry them with us to dinner.

Back in Philadelphia, I pin up each record cover with care. They line the wall below my window and each one brought a little magic to my bedroom. Antiques are special in that way. They are from a different time, were used by different people, and bring their stories with them wherever they go. Who knows where these records started, but they ended up on the streets of New York, and now they’ve come to bring their stories to Philadelphia.

Time blows my mind whenever I think about it. There are different time zones, which means while I’m waking up, other people are fast asleep, others are eating lunch, and other people are going to bed. When I travelled this summer, I experienced this first hand. If I got up early enough in the morning, my friends might still be awake, and later in the day they would just be rising. All of this was happening at the exact same moment, but it was technically different times. How could it be two times at once? How does time stop? Why does time stop for me? Who else was wondering about this with me? I often think about the people who are doing the exact same thing I am doing but around the world, or people who have stood in the same places that I stand. Regardless of what currently covers the land, someone was there, someone came before me, and someone will come after without ever knowing I existed. These records made me think about their stories that I’d never know, and the one I will leave behind. Everything happens at the same time and people cross paths without ever realizing, and I want people to know where I’ve been. Not for my own fame, but because I helped someone. I want for someone’s life to have changed for the better because I was in it, regardless of if the world remembers my name. When I found those records, I couldn’t help but feel the connections they’d had with past owners. First kisses to the soft tunes of a musical soundtrack, angry nights spent listening to loud rock. The life events of another left behind and leaving their mark. When my time is up, I want my accomplishments to leave their mark so that I too can be remembered.


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Advanced Essay #1: Don't Let Fear Speak For You

Posted by Meymey Seng in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 8:16 pm

​Introduction:
The goal of writing this essay is to convey a message that I strongly believe in, which is to not let the fears of others’ hold you back. Sometimes, even good things require a bit of sacrifice. Another part of my goal is to share this motto in a way that is not boring to the reader. I am proud of being able to actually capture my feelings into words. Although, an improvement for the future is to work on my transitions because allowing the two events to flow with one another was difficult for me. 

Advanced Essay:
Almost everything in life is made up of decisions. From the things you do, to the things you say. Making choices are already difficult enough doing yourself, let alone having other people disagree with you. "Be independent and do what you love" is what I try to keep in mind. 
If someone strongly doesn’t want you to do something, don’t listen to them. The problem is if that person is someone important because it’s not easy to simply put their words aside. Trying to do so is almost impossible. Take my word, I’ve tried it. Even if you don’t listen to them and continue doing what they said you shouldn’t do, their worried voices will still be echoing through your ears, weighing a ton on your shoulders. 
Please​ don’t stop me from doing the thing that I enjoy so dearly, my tiny inner voice says, trying to push the weight off my shoulders. The passions I want to explore are told to stop due to the fear and overprotectiveness sent from my family. 
Starting off freshmen year, I wanted to change my lifestyle. I wanted to be more active and soon after heard about Students Run Philly Style. My body filled with excitement seeing that they train students to run the ten mile Broad Street Run.
Thinking that my family would be just as excited as I was is where I went wrong. When I told my uncle, he let out a large laugh as if I was saying a hilarious joke. 
“You can't run ten miles, Mey. Come on, you could barely run half a mile,” he said immediately. 
“That’s because I need to train, but I can in the future, really!” I dragged out.
“Okay, whatever you say,” he replied sarcastically, just to get the conversation over with.
Aside from my confident answer, what he said was true. I was not fit, I could barely run a block without gasping for air. It's almost like seeing a fish out of water. When he said that, there was something that struck in my mind. I need to make a choice. One, I could easily take this to heart and feel bad about myself, ending up in not joining. Second, I could follow my heart and show him that people can change. 
That was the beginning of my running life, so yes, option two won. During our first practice, which was a mile, I was extremely nervous. As I felt myself getting tired, I was tempted to stop, remembering my uncle’s words that maybe running just isn’t for me. Instead, I decided that there’s no going back and continued to run. 
As weeks passed, the miles slowly progressed. In the span of three months, the Broad Street Run was coming up. Hearing the two words “ten miles” put ten pounds on my legs. Luckily, I have an amazing team and coaches who supported me throughout the way. I finished with my best friend, and we both sprinted seeing the large, gorgeous finish line. While running through, medals were given to us.
Wearing that medal proudly, I walked to my uncle’s house. Right when he laid his eyes upon my medal, a big smile spread through his face. He told me he was proud of me and that I did good. Suddenly, all the weight lifted off my shoulders as if it weren’t there to begin with. To be honest, that was not the reaction I was expecting. I don’t know what I was expecting, maybe another chuckle. I guess I haven’t heard the words “I’m proud of you” in a while.
After this, I realized not to let the expectations of others set a limit for myself. I was so thrilled and a couple months later I applied and got accepted to work in the Live Animal Center at the Academy of Natural Sciences. 
When I got accepted, I told my mom and she extremely happy for me because this is something that she knew I really wanted. Although, she then asked me what I will exactly be doing, which is the part I was most thrilled to talk about. Pulling up the Academy’s Instagram, I showed her some of the animals I will be working with, such as snakes, armadillos, hawks, and more. 
Instead of her reaction reflecting my own, she was terrified and wanted me to quit my job. With my bad luck, my doctor disapproved and wanted me to quit because I am allergic to all of the animals. Finding something you are passionate about is not easy, so I was not letting this go. I decided to just drink allergy pills, use eye drops and nasal spray everyday. Even with that, I still have a daily constant cough that I try to hide. 
As her daughter, my mom did not want to see me cough everyday, but luckily, I was able to persuade that I could live with it. I proved to her that these animals have made me more brave and showed me different branches of the work field that I never had the knowledge of. With a lot more persuading, I was able to keep the job, and I can say that I am content. 
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Advanced Essay #1: satisfactory

Posted by James Klenk in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 4:59 pm

​

My essay

​Introduction: this essay was written to show the acceptance of oneself and that the story is playing with the ideals of being told some and how you talk what was told to you. The story also plays with the Ideas of limits and if they could be reached or surpassed. Thought out the essay it is about how something that told of you affect you and how limits affect your ideals.


Advanced Essay:

As I walk through the hall to put my stuff away, I then went to talking to my friend from advisory. We were talking about what we were feeling, and I explained that I was upset about my easy but annoying math benchmark. As we continued to talk about the benchmark she said that she was wasn't upset about anything in life and that she was alway happy with herself. I was, of course, shocked, telling her that ¨Before SLA I went to a school where everyone was dyslexic and had ADHD and that we were told that we could not be satisfied with ourselves and that we should try to improve ourselves for the better at all time. I was taught not to be happy with myself when it come to certain aspect of myself. I know it seem crazy for a school to basically tell you that you're not good but it not, if it went your grew up being that.¨ With a shocked expression, She told me how terrible it was for my to feel that way. She said

¨Oh, are you like upset with them for doing that to you because that like tourable that they made you feel bad about yourself.¨

¨ Why should I be mad at them? If I was happy and satisfied with myself with some like reading level it won't push me to be better. If I didn't push myself to be better with my weakness I couldn't grow as a learner and an all around just better person in general.¨

¨  Just because the told you that you suck at reading and writing  doesn't mean you're happy with your work and  I hoped that you could be happy with your work one day. I went and looked at her with a tilt in my head to look at her eyes and said,

¨ I am usually happy with my final product work. Because  when I am upset with myself gives me the ability allows my to appreciate the work that I done. it allow me to push through my perceived limit to do something that I am proud in because it something that I want to get better at.  

As we get to are first class with the teacher telling use to right down in are journal about the weekend for ten minutes then to share. As we finish the table started to talk and when it was my turn I end and said ¨nothing really happen to me this weekend I just went and did homework and just practice some skill I have forgotten.¨ when I finished I saw the confusion on there face so I went and tried to expand. ¨I went and practice spelling and typing, I don't really like it but my parents made me type the dialogue that was said on the t.v.¨

¨It can't be that bad it's just like one of two episodes of a 30 minute show.¨

¨ It was 3 season of Grey's Anatomy,  do you know how many episodes is in this season. Over 60 episodes.¨

As we finished talking and finished the warm up we sat there doing the classwork. As we talked about the problem as a group as we looked at the equation x=2+3/2 -2/454 10+5 we looked at the word problem that went went with the equation. As we talk the problem made less and less sense with the problem asking about the perpendicular slope plus 22. As we work on solving the rigorous problem one of the group member said ¨I can't do it, the problem make no sense and that it was set up for us to fail.¨

¨this problem is solvable it just we need to work more on it¨

¨ No it's not my thing and that i just can´t¨

¨ well even tho math isn't your thing doesn't mean you can't be better at it and that you even tho you don like the math you still have to do it.¨

As she rolled her eyes and pulled out her phone we gave each other the look getting yourself ready to help her push through her barriers but also know that she was probably not ready to get help that she would need and the group future needs. I went and stood at her and said ¨I know you won't like practicing math, everyone in this room can relate by you are apart of this benchmark group and we need you to reach your potential and we're here to help you with it.¨

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Advanced Essay #1: No Frustration Without Representation

Posted by Kwan Hopkins in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 4:37 pm

An amazing piece from the mind of Kwan Z. Hopkins about his journey to get student government.

​Introduction:
In this paper, I tried my very best to create a relatable experience for the reader and speak to some thoughts they may have had at some point in their lives. Another goal I had in mind was to share an experience from SLA that exposes some of the hardships staff can make you go through. I believe I did both of these things very well. In terms of what I could be doing better, I think I could have stayed closer to the word limit but I couldn't without taking away some great parts of the story I was trying to tell.

Advanced Essay:

Sophomore year was already the hardest, most frustrating year of school I ever had to endure. Beginning the year a relative unknown to my stream and going through the year with strong acrimony for the unnecessary subject matter in every course had both been difficult enough. But imagine going through all that and then having to struggle to do something you’re actually passionate about. That creates an almost unimaginable anger. But I managed to put the animosity I felt for the courses and my ill will about not being a prominent figure in Iron Stream to the side because today was the day I’d meet with Mr. Gerwer… for the fourth time.

I had to begin to advance my agenda somehow. This was my moment to speak up and not let my idea go, nor let my anger go either. Letting go any frustration would be a complete disaster and had to be avoided at all costs. School was over and I walked out of class. Then, down the steps. Then, to stop on the second floor. Mr. Gerwer would always stand outside of Mr. Lehmann’s office to say goodbye to students. I struggled toward him. Something didn’t want me to say anything. But something more identifiable (seemingly my inner annoyance) needed me to talk to him.

“Hey, Mr. Gerwer,” I tried to say confidently.

“Hey, Kwan. What’s up?” he replied.

“I wanted to speak with you quickly about student government.”

The look on his face changed almost immediately. It went from one of genuine happiness from saying goodbye to his students, to one of clear annoyance.

“Actually, do you mind moving over here? I’ll be with you in a minute,” he deflected.

I agreed and moved more toward the window to the left of the main office. Gerwer seemingly wanted to continue his waving routine. Him deeming the future of democracy in our school less important than goodbyes struck a chord. As I waited, I thought and thought of what I was going to say. Finally, my thinking would come to a halt as fewer and fewer students began to walk by.

“Alright,” Gerwer sighed. “What’s up?”

“I wanted to ask you for another opportunity to speak about student government.”

“I actually think we’ve had plenty of opportunity to speak,” he replied.

“I’d have to disagree with you. I don’t believe we’ve ever had a thorough conversation.”

“Well, I do,” he said with a bit of laughter.

“All I’m asking is that you meet with my one more time. Let me share with you why this can work.”

“There’s no point,” he said, this time with more pronounced laughter. “You’ve had plenty of chances,” Gerwer continued.

“No I haven’t. I met with you once and I’ve met with the history department three times. Never have we had the opportunity to actually debate why this is necessary,” I asserted.

At this point, we both showed clear frustration.

“Look, it’s not gonna happen. We’ve talked about it. There’s no need to go any further.”

“I haven’t talked to anyone! Why can’t this work?”

“Staff doesn’t think it’s necessary. I don’t think it’s a good idea,” he huffed.

Everything came crashing down in my mind. I snapped; the one thing I didn’t want to do, nor did I think was going to happen.

“What members of staff? I’d be happy to speak to them too,” I retorted.

“That’s NOT happening.”

“Why not? Because it seems like you’re the only one who has a problem! I mean no disrespect but, it seems a bit selfish to me,” I said with my hands in the air.

There was no turning back now. I decided to call him out. I couldn’t determine whether or not I made a mistake and I didn’t care.

He laughed and said “Alright, I’m done.”

“You’re telling me to give up because of what YOU think. That’s selfish.” I suggested.

“Oh, I’m the selfish one?” he asked as he walked into the office.

I followed and screamed “You’re the selfish one. It’s selfish.”

A few more words were exchanged in clear view of the silent teachers in the room and I decided to storm off. Mr. Gerwer called me back and told me everything was uncalled for and that I crossed a line. He told me to go home.

Anger is interesting. It can come from just about anything or any emotion. Pain, heartbreak, passion-- all of these things can lead to anger under the right circumstances. But passion-- that’s what this speaks to most. To be passionate is to be committed. Commitment to a cause can get anyone to do just about anything. Passion caused my anger to just build and build until I lashed out on whatever was in the way of my goal. My goal was to get a student government at SLA. Mr. Gerwer was now in the way. I had gone into the conversation thinking that letting go all the frustration from the school year, from seating, and from my many efforts to get student government would cause me to lose everything. I ended up doing it anyway and hating myself for it. It was only when I realized that letting go brought forth the truth from me and the person in the way of my goal, that I began to heal and work harder than ever before.


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Advanced Essay #1: Movement

Posted by Sarah Berg in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 3:44 pm

Introduction: My goal for this essay was to explain how I overcame a change in my life by connecting several memories and relating them to the present. I am proud of my descriptive memory scenes. I feel as if I was able to convey the important details without going on forever. I need to improve on explaining ideas within my reflection concisely. I tend to get caught up on how to express exactly what I am trying to say and it doesn’t work out.


We walked through the lush green garden to the small wooden back house, situated away from the street, behind the larger blue house in which my best friend lives. I walked beside her and another best friend, laughing and joking. We stepped inside. There were only two rooms, one with a bed in the corner and bookshelves with hand sewn dolls on them, and a little bathroom.

My friend walked over to the bed and plugged her phone into a speaker sitting there, and began to play music as we talked. She played some songs I didn’t know as the two of them sang to the music. I stood and laughed along as they made screeching sounds and jerked around as poor imitations of melody and dancing. As one song came to a close, she reached over and turned out the lights. The afternoon sun streamed through into the semi darkness, creating contrasting patches of bright spots on the floor as we held our own carefree party within the miniature house. The opening notes to the next song played, bright bouncing chords that were familiar.

“Ooooh I love this song”, my one friend exclaimed.

“I know, it’s such a throwback!” the other yelled over the start of the pounding beat. We continued to flounce around the room as the song went on into the catchy chorus, “no matter what you say or what you do, when I'm alone I'd rather be with you…” The way we felt was reflected in the way we moved; careless, free, nothing held back. We were comfortable in this oddly lit room, with each other, and the music. It was peaceful and chaotic, a physical catastrophe of swinging arms, a mental meditation free of worries. I was content sharing the happiness with my closest friends.

This juxtaposition of peace and chaos is something that I have experienced numerous times in my daily, social or school life. I used to be a very active person, as activity would calm me down. When I was in a chaotic situation, I would feel very relaxed. Another example of this is in the calm that I have felt while practicing or performing circus arts. I remember the thoughts that went through my mind while wrapping myself in fabric before spinning through the air.

A particularly hard trick I once learned was the triple star drop, during summer circus camp. I was so tired. My muscles had been aching for weeks and I could practically feel the pain I would endure in the future. I had lost track of my oxygen intake, didn’t know if I was breathing too fast or not at all. My body had been pushed past its limit, every muscle stretched loose and flexed taut, contorted in impossible movements. My skin was covered in stinging rashes and burns, the results of silken fabric that clung too tightly as it slid against my legs. Angry red scrapes lined my armpits and ankles from the rough rope. My hipbones were purple with bruises from the unforgiving metal of the trapeze bar.

Maybe I was so calm because my brain was flushed with blood. Maybe I had no space in my mind for worry because it was filled with the list of every move to make, every transition into the next position to be executed flawlessly. I had no time to think about what would happen if I fell because I was reviewing my checklist, going down the lines one by one, making sure everything was in place. But I did it automatically anyway; the right side invert, right leg hook, left arm reaches down, loops around the left leg, lift up and out, scoop fabric up and invert again, now do it all again, and again, right leg, left arm, left leg, now wrap around, once, twice, okay. I had done it. My mind was clear as I readied myself for the drop. My body was upside down 30 feet in the air and I’d never felt safer. This calmness is what led me to become so passionate about circus arts. It was an escape, an opportunity to clear my mind. Circus was being in the moment.

A year ago when these activities were taken away from me, everything was reversed. For a time I spent my days sedentary. I was not allowed to walk or even wheel my own wheelchair. My unexpended energy bottled up inside my head since I could not let it out through movement. It rattled around in there, sending my thoughts everywhere in disarray.

Now, I sit at the front of the fitness room and watch thirty kids jump and stretch and sweat. They come into the room solemn from other classes, systematically filing in, a sense of refinement around the way they move. Throughout the next hour, they begin to smile more, laughing as they complain of sore muscles and how the class is “killing” them, and it seems that as they move they let off steam. This is not to say that I am sad now. This is to say that upon reflecting over these memories of movement, I have realized how I have adapted over the past year. I have learned that discontent and restrained resentment need to be released somehow. I have developed new ways to let my energy out, most commonly through writing, drawing, reading, or working. Nostalgically analyzing my past has shown me how different it is from the present, but not that it is better either way, simply different. Change has come, and phases have gone. Maybe I will soon be able to return to circus as I have to dancing with my friends and simply walking. If I don’t, I can still remember the serenity of hanging upside down preparing for my favorite trick.


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Advanced Essay #1: Never let anything get in your way

Posted by Ashley De La Cruz in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 3:38 pm

Introduction

My goal for this paper is to share my story with others, so that they can understand why I am a certain way. I want people to know, how it is that I started speaking the same language as everyone else. A part that I am proud of is where I explain how it was going out to try to get help from others and how I felt. Something that needs improvement is that I should add more details and be more descriptive. Also, I should try to reflect more and try to connect it with my larger idea.


Never let anything get in your way

Daily, we go around, pressured by obstacles thrown into our path in order to make us give up and quit. My parents are both Mexican, so they grew up learning spanish, and weren’t taught english in their schools. They decided to come to the US in order to provide a better life for themselves and for their future family. As I grew up, the language I was taught was spanish, so it was difficult for me to communicate with others. Eventually, I started going to Pre-Kindergarten, but it was a difficult time for me because I couldn’t understand the teachers or my classmates, so I wasn’t learning anything. There were many times when I would cry, because when it came to recess, I would be playing by myself because I had no friends because of the language barrier. I would sit near the tall princess' castle, picturing myself as the princess living in a magical land filled with happiness and everyone getting along. When it came to homework, I didn’t understand what was on the paper, and neither did my parents, so we would have to go out and ask others like our neighbors for help.

At the time, I used to be super embarrassed, because I hated having to go to the same people over and over and ask them for help. At times, I felt dumb because I was the only one having trouble in class. However, thanks to my mom always pushing me, and to my pre-k teacher, little by little, I started learning more and more English. One day, the teacher announced that we would be having an end-of-year celebration, where we would present a play to our parents and other students. The teacher said, “Everyone, we’re going to be having a safari themed play. 1 person is going to be the guide and everyone else is going to be some animal.” I was beyond excited to learn that I had been chosen to narrate the story and be guide. I practiced everyday, and finally, the day of the play arrived. I read every part carefully and at the end, everyone got up and applauded me. When it was done, many parents and other teachers came up to me and congratulated me for my wonderful reading.

If it weren’t for my determination and the extreme support from my parents, I probably would’ve never gotten this chance to be the reader. Thanks to them and to the resources presented to me, I was able to learn English, and then move on and help my parents with it. Ever since those days, I’ve learned to give back to those that were just like me, using my english to help others out. For example, I would be the one to help my siblings with their homework because my parents didn’t understand. I’ve also been an interpreter to my parents when it comes to appointments or meetings, I help translate. I’ve also helped some of my parents friends with translating things and helping them understand.

I’m thankful that my parents decided to learn english, because it’s helpful now, so that my family members aren’t only relying on me for help. From these experiences, it’s shaped who I am as a person, I’ve become independent because I’ve basically had myself as my “teacher” and I don’t often ask for help because of how often I did when I was younger. Sometimes we take the safe road on many things, instead of wanting to take risks. It’s probably because we are scared of what those risks might lead to, we are scared of failing. As I’ve grown up, I’ve had many decisions to make where I knew that taking a risk, stepping up, and not giving up would help me accomplish things. I thank God for giving me the strength to never give up, He had a reason for my struggles and a gift for my faithfulness. As Confucius says, “Our greatest glory is not in never falling but in rising every time we fall.”

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Advanced Essay #1: Traffic Light

Posted by Autumn Lor in English 3 · Block · A Band on Sunday, September 24, 2017 at 2:54 pm

Introduction

My paper is about how everything around me is different from what I want and need. You’ll find out that the more people that come into my life makes it harder for me to just be free of life. Throughout the story, there are parts where you should ask yourself and compare how life is different for each person. Some people may think that my story isn’t relatable at all, others believe they could be living the same life. I want to thank Amelia because she helped me include greats ideas to make the story more powerful and compare it to other things. If I had the chance to rewrite this essay, I should have made the story build up more to show the purpose of the whole story.


Traffic Light

I’ve always thought about kids. Constantly questioning myself if I want kids or  to push them aside for as long as possible. When I was eight years old, my cousin Aedan was born. At this age, I had to learn to take care of him while still taking care of myself along the way. Changing diapers, making milk/food to feed him, putting him to sleep and so much more. As a child, I would watch kids on T.V. being given fake babies to learn how to care for them but I was given a real live baby. There wasn’t plenty time or a moment to fail, only success. As I got older, there came a point where more babies came into my life. It was more difficult each time because that also meant more responsibilities coming along with each one. I was given these babies without any help and I was glad they weren’t mine because I didn’t have to watch them day and night.

At that age I couldn't help but think that children are only used for play. Now I can't help but think, what if I’d have to experience it on my own?

The rush of anger comes when I hear babies cry, they can't tell you what they want, so how exactly would you know? A bottle would appear in their mouth in two seconds but will then disappear in one. After holding them for so long, my arms start to shrivel and so I put the baby down ever so gently so they could sleep without waking up again.

To have some time to myself and relax, there are days where, I wake up at six in the morning to take a nice long, warm, steamy shower. By long, I mean ten minutes. After I put on my uniform, I would get my brothers, Evan and Aaron, dressed. Along with that I would fight with them to brush their teeth, pick up their dirty laundry, and check everyone’s homework before I have to leave. Time is 8:15 and I’m still struggling to finish all these things.

As the day goes on, I stop thinking about my brothers and go on with my life. School is fun because I’m without them but my peers know me as the mom. The mom who gives reminders about where they need to be, what they need to do, and how to do things. When they call me mom it’s hard to think will I always be like this and is that a good thing; am I a good person?

Walking home alone from school, I see parents picking up their kids from the school yard. All of a sudden, I remembered I was supposed to do something after school, but I was already half way home. It takes six minutes to walk from my house to their school but school was dismissed twenty minutes ago, so I, of course had to rush. I put both of my book bags straps on and began to run. Every time I got to a light it was always green, as if the light knew I was in a rush, until the last one. It felt like the longest red light I had ever crossed. By the time the light turned green, the people from my initial start was next to me. Rushing up the hill into the elementary school, up the stairs, then down the hall to pick one of them up. Immediately after, going back out the school, down the hill into the middle school to pick up Evan.

After running from these places, I couldn’t feel my feet but I could catch my breath. As I was walking home with Evan and Aaron I thought about what my place in life is. When is it my time to show who I am? It terrifying to think about myself and put myself first when there are other people who are more important. I can’t put myself first when there are other things that need to be taken care of. School comes first but I’m too busy thinking about doing the laundry for everyone in the house. Family comes first but I’m trying to get myself together. Just thinking about what’s wrong with me, a tear fell down my face and onto the pavement right in front of me. One tear drop turns into rain. I start to push the boys to run fast so we could get home.

When I got home I thought to myself, who am I to everyone? No one at my house supported me, people wouldn't care if I went away. If I went away I wouldn’t know where to go. If I left, who would take care of the kids. I can’t focus on me without thinking about the kids and teaching them to do things on their own so I can leave and be free. It difficult to think that they are the reason I can’t leave. They rely on me so much that they’re now too lazy to do things themselves and restrains myself from doing other things. When will it be my time to live my life as a kid and be fun because life is short and soon I have to think about how to live by myself, with work, and paying bills. When that time comes will there be anyone to help me then?


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